February 11, 2012

~*~Blue Despair~*~

Here it is!  Book three!  Comments are going to be reopened.  I trust you all will post responsibly and kindly.  I will accept gentle criticism.  You all are not real book critics.  It isn't kind to tear into something I've worked very hard on.  And let me remind you, I do not have to share these stories with you.  I could keep them to myself.  Leah or Gabby, notify Paige this is posted and let me know when she's seen it.  This should stay posted until about Monday afternoon.  Maybe sooner, maybe later.

~Leaving this up so everyone can see my comment at the bottom~

36 comments:

  1. Fab story, Emma! It's sad at the end what happens to them, but it was an excellent plot getting up to that. :) Are you going to write anymore, or is this the end of that series? I loved it so much, I hope you write more. :D I didn't notice any typos or grammar errors, nice job!
    <3 Seana

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  2. Wow, girl you have the skills of a writer. Great job! :) You ARE a writer!

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  3. I almost started crying but my brother was singing a song in a very weird voice so I started laughing instead. It was so sad.
    Did you ever post LOVE RED? If you did I never saw it.

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    1. Yes, I did, but I won't be posting it again, unfortunately.

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  4. **SIGH** That was amazing....will there be a fourth book?

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    1. Yup! It's written, and my friends who get first dibs are reading it now.

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    2. That's good! :) Will you be re-posting Envy Green or Love Red? I didn't get a chance to read Love Red. :D

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    3. Sorry, no. I want to limit the time my stories are up so there's less of a chance for them to be stolen.

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    4. That is very smart! Too bad, though! I can't believe people would do that...

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  5. Overall, the best story of the three. The overall premise was much better than either of the first two, because the problem was consistently apparent through the whole story. There was one error that I felt pertinent to point out to you. In the paragraph before the first '~*~', you suddenly switched to using 'you.' Seeing as the story is written in third person, using 'you' should be strictly avoided unless one character is talking to another, because 'you' implies the story was written in second person, and switching tenses is often confusing for the reader.

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    1. I can see how you'd find that confusing. ;) It was actually Juliette thinking that sort of. Since that first part was her POV, she was thinking "you" as in herself. Is that not confusing, too? xD

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    2. The whole story is written from third person, based on the phrasing you used. Therefore, no part can be from inside Juliette's head without italicizing and having her actually thinking that. It's confusing for any reader. I would suggest rewriting it to either be inside her head (with italics), or to be in third person, such as: "There was nothing like being young and in love, even [with a] boyfriend [who] was set to attend the University of Oxford that fall..."

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    3. Thank you for your kind suggestions. :) I will consider what you have to say and possibly revise what I have written.

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  6. If it makes you feel better, you can add a copyright sign next on your story post like this:

    "The golden show glowed and all of a sudden...."

    Copyright (c)2012 Reviewer11

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  7. You should re-post the 2nd book! I never got to read it :( so I'm kinda confused.

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  8. I loved it!! The ending was super sad and I can't wait to read the next one!

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  9. I my goodness! I NEVER saw that comin'! It is really sad and makes me want the next book so much more :) Great writing and I can't wait for the next one!

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  10. Guys, once again, someone submitted a rude comment with some R-rated profanity. I will not tolerate this. I do not want to remove comments again. I am probably going to make some adjustments as to who can comment and who cannot.

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  11. THAT WAS FABULOUS! You are very talented. It was quite sad but I loved it anyway.

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  12. i cant belive i missed it again! :(

    Oh well i bet it was wonderful! :)

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    1. Sorry, Rose! :( Maybe you'll catch book 4. ;)

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    2. I GOT BOOK FOUR AND I LOVED IT!!!!

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  13. What a lovely story! I hope you keep writing and don't let the inappropriate coments discourage you. :) I think people are just jealous of your awesome writing skills!

    God Bless,

    The Curious Christian

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    1. I agree. Don't let them get you down. :)

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    2. God is blessing you for that! :) It may not seem like it sometimes, but God is blessing you for not posting those! I'm sorry you had to see those, though. Keep on writing!

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  14. Wow. That was AMAZING. "For Good"--what I consider the ultimate parting song--was playing in my head. You are an amazing author. Keep writing, and don't let those inappropriate comments put you down!

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    1. Thanks, but I want to know how you read it, since I edited the story out...?

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  15. I read it before, and I loved it but I just registered yesterday.

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    1. Ah, that makes sense. Well, I'm glad you registered because I'm going to be making changes to the commenting abilities soon. ;)

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    2. Oh no!!! Does that mean you have to be on Blogger to comment?

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    3. I'm exploring the options. I probably won't announce the kind of change I'm going to make (so it'll make it harder for the rude anonymous person to figure out what to do to get comment abilities), but I want to accomodate my nicest commenters, so we'll see what happens. ;)

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    4. I figured you probably wouldn't say, but that's understandable! :) Keep up the good work!

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  16. Sad I didn't get to read it, it seemed that it wasn't being updated when I was checking in.
    Mind emailing it to me? Haha. LMK when you need the 5th book' cover :)

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    1. Oh, book 4 was the last one. ;) It has an epilogue. :)

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    2. Is it? Oh well.
      I'll be following this blog for more of your work :)

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